when a person is alive,He need study,otherwise,he can not catch up the step of the time.If you keep on study everyday ,you will become knowledgeable,That will help you do your job quickly and better,and you will go through with others smoothly.Study can bring you a better life.

一個人活著，就要學(xué)習，不然趕不上時間變化的腳步。每天堅持學(xué)習，會使你變得知識淵博，并讓你更好、更高效地工作。學(xué)習能給你帶來更好的生活。

William老師評語：6分。He need：needs；keep on study介詞后動詞時態(tài)搭配能力有待提高；

That will help you do your job quickly and better，the step of the time等語句尚保留明顯中式思維痕跡；有部分細節(jié)毛病，對于時態(tài)、短語搭配尚待熟悉；

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I'm very glad to  Join this team，It helped me to improve my  Spoken english。Now，I practise my spoken english every morning，I think it has become a part of my life.  Thank  every friend and every teacher.   Hope you study english more and more hard.

我很開心加入到這個團隊，它幫助我提高了我的口語?，F(xiàn)在，我堅持每天早晨練習口語，這已經(jīng)成為我生活的一部分。感謝每位老師，每一位同學(xué)，希望大家更努力的學(xué)習英語。

Vien老師評語：6分。Hope you study more and more hard.此處有語法錯誤，hard的比較級是harder,正確寫法是Hope you study harder.

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I already learned English with teacher Jimmy for half a year. Many people with me  study english everyday although we’re not at the same place. I know study can bring me about a good habit, improving my english  a lot. Thanks for Haixuekeji.

跟吉米老師學(xué)習英語已經(jīng)有半年了，很多朋友每天跟我一起學(xué)習，盡管我們不在同一個地方。我知道學(xué)習能讓我形成一個好習慣，提高我的英語能力。感謝海學(xué)科技。

Vien老師評語：5分。I already learned English with teacher Jimmy for half a year.此處有語法錯誤，表示表示動作發(fā)生在過去，但與現(xiàn)在的情況有聯(lián)系，以及一些表示不確定的過去時間狀語already連用時要用現(xiàn)在完成時態(tài)。正確的寫法是I have already learned English with teacher Jimmy for half a year. I know study can bring me about a good habit。此處有語法錯誤，bring sb sth. 所以此處應(yīng)為 I know study can bring me a good habit.  Thanks for Haixuekeji.此處不完整， thanks for表示因...而感謝，正確的寫法是 Thanks for Haixuekeji's help.

海學(xué)英語真愛76班

Continous study  is very important for everybody. It could bring  you continous energy for your future work or life. With ongoing learning, you could get more method or motivation. Perhaps it could help you get out of difficulties just beacause one sentence or word in the book.It could make you peaseful  and confident no matter in good times or poor times. Just like old sayings,  Don't need to build high towers for cozy living. There are houses of gold in books.

不間斷的學(xué)習對每個人都很重要。它能讓你的生活和工作有持續(xù)不間斷的能量。通過持續(xù)地學(xué)習，你能學(xué)到更多的方法和動力。可能它能幫你解決書本里的一個句子或一個單詞帶給你的困難，讓你不管在好的還是壞的情況下都能開心自信應(yīng)對。像老話說的，安居不用架高樓，書中自有黃金屋。

William老師評語：6分。for your future work or life可以改為It could bring  you continous energy in work or life in the future；

Method相當于way，方法，用復(fù)數(shù)；

Because后面接句子成分，應(yīng)改為“because of one sentence”；

no matter in good times or poor times此處語義不明

Don't need to build high towers for cozy living.開頭小寫；

句子成分可做精簡處理，部分表達尚有中式思維成分。

海學(xué)英語

I Feel Happy When I'm Learning

Perhaps every student had ever asked himself: why should I study?

well, reasons for this question are quite a lot. And now I just wanna to say mine。

It's simple: I feel happy when I'm learning

Yes, I do enjoy my learning time

Seeing this, you might feel confused and because of this, I will explain it to you

When I'm studying, I feel myself sailing in the sea of knowledge.There're so many mysterious doors which are waiting for me to open and there're so many unknown fields which are waiting for me to explore

學(xué)習使我開心。

可能每個學(xué)生都問過自己：為什么我要學(xué)習？

這個問題的答案有很多，現(xiàn)在我想說說我的答案。

很簡單，因為學(xué)習使我開心。

我很享受學(xué)習的時光。

看到這里，你可能會困惑為什么是這個原因。我會解釋給你聽。當我在學(xué)習的時候，我覺得我在知識的海洋里航行。有太多神秘的門等著我去打開和有許多等著我去探險的領(lǐng)域。

William老師評語：5分。“或許每個學(xué)生都有問過自己”：Perhaps every student has had ever asked himself；Quite a lot, I feel myself sailing等表達尚待改善；

句子主旨可以表達得更清晰，有部分中式表達。

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I was very interested in English, I also  learning English when i was 50 years old, learning can bring us knowledge, let me know the  world outside, It can enrich myself, when I go abroad can communicate with foreigners, this is a very happy thing.

我對學(xué)習英語很感興趣，我50歲的時候開始學(xué)習英語，學(xué)習能給我們帶來知識，讓我了解外面的世界，能充實我自己，當我去國外的時候可以和老外交流，這是一件很開心的事。

William老師評語：6分。I also  learning English改為“l(fā)earn”；let me know the  world outside改為“outside world”；when I go abroad can communicate with foreigners存在中式表達思維；

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I come from Beijing. l am sixty. Learning English is my hobby. I'v been studying here for a few months. I felt well,   because the teachers are great. If you ask me,   why I study English,  because I want to be a volunteer, service community, play the leftovers. My English is not good, so I'm continue to study hard with Jimmy's team.

我來自北京，60歲，學(xué)習英語是我的愛好。我來這里學(xué)習已經(jīng)有幾個月了。感覺很好，因為我想成為一個志愿者服務(wù)社會。我的英語不太好，所以我會堅持跟海學(xué)科技學(xué)習。

Brand老師評語：7分。I felt well前面用現(xiàn)在完成時態(tài)，后面也應(yīng)該用現(xiàn)在完成時態(tài)，保持時態(tài)的統(tǒng)一，改成I’ve been feeling great. If you ask me是虛擬語氣，應(yīng)該用過時態(tài)，改成：If you asked me why I studied English，that’s because I want to be a volunteer,  My English is not good改成 My English is not good enough！最后一個句子so I will continue to study hard with Jimmy's team.

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Study means to learn knowledge，I think and believe that study is happening all the time, and it is not limited in the regular learning. I believe that if we keep thinking, we are studying. Study brings us valuable things, and the most important thing is critical thinking.A complete person will not follow the crowd, he can figure out the truth and fake. Study also brings us a bigger world. The more we read, the farther distance we can reach. A person is easy to be stuck in the current difficulty, but if he can see the beauty of life, he will adjust himself and be positive to life.

學(xué)習就是學(xué)習知識。我認為學(xué)習無處不在，并不只限于常規(guī)的學(xué)習。如果我們保持思考，我們就是在學(xué)習。學(xué)習帶給我很多有價值的東西，其中最重要的是批判性思考。一個獨立、完整的人是不會隨波逐流的，他會明辨是非。學(xué)習能讓我看到更廣闊的世界。我學(xué)習得越多，我就能看得越遠。人是很容易受困于現(xiàn)狀，但如果他能看到生活的美好，他會調(diào)整自身并積極地應(yīng)對。

Brand老師評語：8分。regular learning 改為 traditional 或者是 conventional learning。regular指的是常規(guī)的意思。

he can figure out the truth and fake改成 he or she can tell the truth from the wrong, the genuine from the superficial. He 統(tǒng)一改成  he or she，因為第三人稱有男他和女她。

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   When it comes to study, we all may agree that study would benefit us a lot. So we may say that:I enjoy study , I love study even without any reason! ??But have you ever thought what can study excalty bring to us?And why you are always be happy when you study?

當我們說起學(xué)習時，我們都知道它能帶給我們很多益處。所以或許說我們都是很愛學(xué)習的。我甚至是不需要理由的熱愛學(xué)習。但你有沒有想過學(xué)習能真正給我們帶來什么嗎？為什么當我們學(xué)到東西而感到快樂？

   Well , here~ I'd  like to share my perspective:

   在此，我將分享我的看法：

   First of all, I think study can makes us happy and joyful. Whenever we study we get more knowledge,so we'll be more confident in somehow. At the mean time when we spend more time on study we do not have time to worry about something despression.That's also the  faction of study~eliminate sorrow.??

 首先，我認為學(xué)習能讓我們感到幸?？鞓?。無論何時，只要我們學(xué)了，就一定會有收獲，我們會變得更加自信。同時，學(xué)習使我們沒空去想一些煩心事。這可以說是學(xué)習排憂了吧？

  Secondly, study can enhance  one's charm.

其二，學(xué)習可以增強一個人的魅力。

In most of case, study will makes you charming than ever before. Cause when we start invert our  time to change ourselves especially to improve ourself ,  we are concious about learning. We will study sth with all our heart.

在大多數(shù)情況下，學(xué)習讓你比從前更加有魅力。因為當我們花時間來完善自我時，我們是在用心的汲取營養(yǎng)。

We 'll be more perseverance,  more active , and more postive . That's the magical power of study~so attractive to everyone !

   Last, it is also the most  crucial advantage which study can bring to us . I always favour that study can give us a postive  influence on our mind.That's also illustrate ~ why we need study  through our life long.   We learned how to think thought study. And also we are clarify about what we don't know due to the shortage what expose in study.

     We can not  live without thinking, so that means we  cannot live  without study .  Study makes our life  fulfilled and rich in mental. we gonna  love it and love our life  ??forever.

Brand老師評語：8分。So we may say that: I enjoy study里面we 和 I 不統(tǒng)一，人稱不統(tǒng)一，we may say that:we all enjoy studying (enjoy doing something)  I love study 改成 I love studying; But have you ever thought 里面 thought 后面需要加上一個介詞 thought about. But have you ever thought about what study can exactly bring to us? 這個才是正確的語序。At the mean time 應(yīng)改為：in the mean time

That's also the  faction of study~eliminate sorrow.?? 表達有誤。